Essay Report
Student ID:937235
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Essay Report Student ID:937235 |
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Integrated Writing Task
Hight taxes on products like cigarettes is example1 of sin tax.2 Is the sin tax really help3 to decrease the rate of smoking\? In the lecture, the speaker does not think that sin taxes can decrease the rate of somking4 people. First, the speaker mentions that the cigarettes' price is increase5 but the rate of smoking people is still increase.6 So the speaker does think sin taxes is help7 to decrease somking8 people. The speaker thinks the school9 educationa10 is nore11 important than sin taxes. Second, the speakers thinks if cigarettes and alcohol are not good things , the government can ban cigarettes and alcohol. The sin taxes are not fair to people who smoking12 and drinking.13The speaker does not think sin taxes are "win-win"文法/句型分析
1 這個名詞的形式似乎和上下文不太吻合。
2 這個名詞的形式又一次不太正確。
3 這個字是正確的，但其形式是錯的。
4檢查一下拼字。
5這個動詞時態不太正確。
6為什麼要用這個動詞形式呢？
7主動還是被動？
8拼字
9這又一次不是個正確的名詞形式。
10這裡的拼字也不正確。
11此處在拼字方面也有錯誤。
12這真的是你要的動詞形式嗎？
13這個動詞的形式又一次有點錯誤。
章法分析
為了要在Integrated task中得到高分，你需要了解文章內容、好好的記筆記、並替你的讀者強調出兩者間的關鍵關聯。你在聽力方面似乎有點麻煩，因為你寫出的某部分內容是錯的。你也沒有提到關鍵的內容。 你無法在這種情況下寫出一偏好的文章。
Integrated Task Score:2
Independent Writing Task
I agree it is better to learn from a teacher than to learn on your own. There is14 several reasons why I think it is better to learn from a teacher.My first reason is that a teacher has more15 experiences, he/she can teach me his/her experiences. 16 Experience cannot learn from books. 17 For example, one of my English teachers teach18 me not only English setences19 but also teach20 me using ways. 21 If I learn22 on my own, English setences23 will always be English setences. 24
My second reason is that a teacher can teach you the main point.It is really hard to understand the main topic 25 without a teacher. For example, when I study Chinese poems that I cannot find the main ideas of poems. 26
My third reason is that a teacher can teacher by rules and logics.27For example, when I learning28 math by myself I cannot find the rules and think logically. My math teacher teached29 me the ways of thinkings. 30
Learning from a teacher is really help31 for me when I start studying a new subject. However, after a teacher teach32 you, you must study on your own 33 . Or that will be helpless to learn from a teacher. 34 Therefore, I really agree to learn from a teacher.
文法/句型分析
14檢查一下主詞。
15這個字似乎也不是最好的選擇。
16這是連綴句。這很嚴重！
17外國人會不懂你所想要表達的意思。這很嚴重！
18動詞時態
19這裡的拼字也不正確。
20 這真的是你要的動詞形式嗎？
21 這個句子也在英文中一點意義也沒有。這很嚴重！
22 為什麼要用這個動詞形式呢？
23 拼字
24 這又一次在英文中沒有意義。這很嚴重！
25 我這裡又一次不知道你在這裡要表達的內容為何。這很嚴重！
26 句子不完整。
27 這又一次在英文中沒有意義。這很嚴重！
28 這個動詞的形式也有點錯誤。
29 檢查一下拼字。
30 你要表達的意思是什麼？
31 注意一下是主動還是被動！
32 這裡的主詞和動詞也不一致。
33 這似乎和你要寫的內容沒有關聯。
34 這又一次是一個不完整的句子。我這裡也不知道你在這裡要表達的內容為何。這很嚴重！
章法分析
你的文章中最引人注目的部分就是你的基礎英文。你需要在文法和句型結構上多做些努力。要了解你寫的文章內容是一件很困難的事。你的主文段落內容雖圍繞著主題打轉，但你需要在例子的部分著墨得更深入些。還有有些地方(如learning math by myself I cannot find the rules and think logically.)你描寫得不夠特定。Independent Task Score:2
Overall Commentary and Analysis
這是你第一次的模擬考。請記住，你今天的成績代表了你的 "starting line," 而非 "finish line."你可以運用上面的分析來改進你的技巧。
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Quick Stats for Student ID:937235 |
Times Tested:1 Integrated Task Average:2 Independent Task Average:2 Overall Average:2 |
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| Grader: Jeff
Date Graded: 2006/7/26 |
